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Re: Rise of the Dark Brotherhood 3: The Ultimate Gizoid

Postby The Shadow Emperor » Sun May 27, 2012 9:06 pm

Whoa, this thread finally reached 10,000 views! :shock: Thanks for reading, everyone, and let's see if we can hit 20,000!

Originally I had the final part of Mighty and Ray's quest slated for this chapter, but I changed my mind and decided to put this totally new chapter here instead. Just goes to show that nothing is set in stone.

Anyone remember Chapter 52? I enjoyed writing Lien-Da's flashback chapter so much that I decided to do another one. Enjoy, peoples! This should shed even more light on why Lien-Da hates the Nocturnus so much. If you're an echidna fan, this is your kind of chapter...so what are you waiting for? Read on. Sorry for more time skipping, but to make it fit this chapter has to take place a few hours before Thrash's little adventure in Nocturne.


Chapter 70: Rivalries

Nocturne, Dark Legion barracks, afternoon

Lien-Da entered the Dark Legion's barracks intending to see her grandfather Moritori Rex, and was mildly annoyed to see the place brimming with Legionnaires. But she could be patient, as she was, after all, still hours away from destroying her lifetime enemy. As before, she waited around for her subordinates of the Dark Legion to leave before speaking to her grandfather, and once her people had sufficiently thinned she shoed away the last group of Legionnaires away, sending them off to go help rebuild Echidnaopolis. Finally, with the broad room empty Lien-Da walked over to Moritori's bedside and gently nudged his shoulder with her hand. Her aging ancestor's eyes opened immediately, almost taking her by surprise. "I thought you were sleeping...?" she asked in slight confusion.

"Well, dear...as you should well know, pretending is one of my strong suits," rasped Moritori Rex. "I could tell you wanted to talk, so I pretended to be asleep until we were in private, lest one of our rank-and-file overheard and tattle on us. Now, did you do as I suggested and meet with General von Stryker?"

Lien-Da smiled, which was, given her personality and the situation, a very rare occurrence. "I did, sir, and it went better than I ever could've imagined! Sure, I ran into a few snags at the beginning...the guy still hates our guts, obviously...but he's happy to help us blow this dismal place to pieces. After giving it some thought, we decided that a full-out frontal assault wouldn't be a particularly viable option, given how fierce and outright brutal the clan has proven to be in the past. Not only that, but after losing dozens of soldiers to the Egg Grapes and Enerjak, they outnumber us by too large a ratio for comfort, and heck, their weaponry is so advanced we barely stand a chance against them, as much as I'm loath to admit it. So, after carefully considering our options, the General and I opted to use a slightly more subtle method--a simple stealth mission, one that hardly stands any chance of failing. The stakes are higher than ever before, after all--this time, there is no room for failure. But I will make sure it succeeds. It has to."

"Mmm, I figured Helmut would see it your way," whispered Moritori, after which he coughed and wheezed a few times. "So have the two of your worked out some sort of arrangement as to what will become of our great Legion once the plan is put into place? Surely you didn't agree to leave the island, did you?"

Outside the chamber, Kommissar Gae-Na exited Nocturne's labyrinthine passages carrying a datapad with a complete catalog of what was left of the Dark Legion's weapons arsenal, as had been requested by the Grandmaster. She pushed open the door to the Legion's chamber, humming under her breath, and immediately noticed Lien-Da and Moritori talking without anyone else around, neither noticing the Kommissar's appearance. Oops, looks like I'm interrupting something, she thought silently, backing away. Guess I better steer clear of her for the moment...I mean, she's not exactly in a good mood today, is she?

"Nah," replied Lien-Da, sitting on the foot of her grandfather's bed, "and even if I did promise that there's no way that I'd actually do it. Basically I told him that we'd be able to work it out after we destroyed those barbaric armor-wearing beasts." She smiled, enjoying the mental image.

The as-of-yet unnoticed Gae-Na, who was slowly backing out of the room heard the words "destroyed those barbaric armor-wearing beasts." She nearly dropped her datapad. What in the world is she talking about? she wondered, then the realization hit her like a charging pasha.

Moritori's smile twitched, but it otherwise remained. "I've been most curious as to how you will be carrying out this task. Mind enlightening this curious old mind?"

"Of course, Granddad," said Lien-Da. "In matter of mere hours our ally Thrash and the dingoes will be using a Warp Ring to bypass all of the citadel's defenses and install several heavy-duty explosive devices in Nocturne's ammunition storage depot...and once they're activated, the resulting explosion will have enough power to level this entire stupid place to the ground! With them out of the way, our claim on Angel Island's lands will be unquestioned save for that of those bothersome dingoes, and we can go and reclaim our fortress, eliminate the Dingo Regime, and then Angel Island will finally be ours after four hundred years of struggling! Does that sound like a plan to you, Grandfather?"

"It does, but what about us? And let's say that echidna civilians are killed as well as the Nocturnus?" asked Moritori, rubbing his chin.

"Hey, I don't want to kill any innocents, just the Nocturnus, Grandfather," said Lien-Da, cackling maliciously. "Nocturne's plenty far enough away from Echidnaopolis itself, so there's hardly any risk of collateral damage. And you needn't worry; when the bombs go off every single being in the Legion--ourselves included--will be conveniently be outside, toiling away at the reconstruction effort...and far away from the actual explosion. Tonight, the entire Nocturnus Clan will die--and I cannot reiterate this enough--of that you can be absolutely certain."

Finally, the dread-filled spying Kommissar, lurking by the barrack entrance, was unable to remain hidden any longer and not speak up. Her heart pounding and her pulse elevated, Gae-Na stepped out into the open from behind a wall fixture, ready to incur Lien-Da's wrath if need be if it meant doing the right thing. "You'll have to pardon my interruption, ma'am," she began, "but I couldn't help but overhear the details of your little plan."

Lien-Da's eyes widened and she jumped off Moritori's bed and vaulted across the room, landing swiftly on the ground by Gae-Na. She walked forward slowly while she locked eyes with and spat venom at her terrified Kommissar, who was fast becoming genuinely afraid for her life. "What do you think gives you the right to eavesdrop on my conversations?!" hollered Lien-Da, lunging forward, grabbing Gae-Na's neck and slamming her roughly into the nearest wall. "Well?! Darn it all, woman, speak!"

Gae-Na's heart nearly stopped. "I-I-I was j-just d-d-delivering your w-weapons report, ma'am!" she offered lamely, holding up the datapad. Lien-Da swatted it from her hand and it clanged against the ground, sparking.

"Listen up, Kommissar," she spat in Gae-Na's face, "you are the most loyal and devoted Legionnaire to my cause I have ever met. I know that you wouldn't do something to jeopardize our friendship, or your standing in the chain of command...so let me tell you a little something, understand? If you say a single word to anyone about what you heard here today, or even so much as hint to anyone about our plan, then I will personally see to it that those are the last words you ever say."

Lien-Da paused briefly to allow her words to sink in. "Got it?" she inquired, her vice-like grip tightening on Gae-Na's throat.

"Y-Y-Y-Yes, m-m-ma'am!" gasped Gae-Na, still pressed up against the metal wall, sweating and trembling madly. Lien-Da's lower lip curled and she relinquished her hold on Gae-Na's neck and let her drop to the ground, gasping for breath.

"Good, I'm glad we understand each other," said Lien-Da, who turned toe and stormed out of the room. Gae-Na watched the Grandmaster's shadow vanish and around the corner, remaining on the ground, massaging her aching neck and shaking uncontrollably. On his bed Moritori Rex rested silently, watching the conflicted Gae-Na sit pathetically with her head held limply on the floor, overcome with despair.

He grunted loudly, arousing her attention and reminding her of his presence. "Come here, girl," he beckoned, motioning with his index finger. Gae-Na took a moment to steady her breathing and rose, heart hammering in her throat, and made her way to Moritori's bedside. She sat on the bed opposite his and looked at her lap, unsure of what to say.

"To be truthful, not even I had expected that," said Moritori, half to himself. "I knew she hated the Nocturnus, but not the extent that she'd throttle her friends in her pursuit of revenge."

"I d-don't understand wh-what..." stuttered Gae-Na, head in hands.

"...What her problem is?" finished Moritori. "Well, at the very least, perhaps I can shed some light on her motivations for you."

Gae-Na looked up, surprised. "Y-You'd do that? Forgive my insolence, sir...but I never would've thought you were the understanding type."

Moritori frowned. "Truth be told, girl, I went through some...changes...when I was trapped in that Nocturnus prison cell. I had nothing. Nothing but my hated enemies to keep me company for what felt like eternity. I was shunned and ignored by them for the most part...but we did interact. The whole incident cooled my passion--and my temper. When Guardian Knuckles came to rescue me, I had basically lost what little drive I had left to continue striving toward the goals of the Legion..."

He paused, a bit embarrassed at his rambling. "Well...I'm afraid that's hardly your concern, so let's get on the point, shall we? It all started a long time ago...nearly twenty years in Twilight time. When Luger's offspring Kragok and Lien-Da were around the age of eight, the Dark Legion was able to exit the Twilight Zone due to a random fluctuation in the Zone's entropy levels. However, Luger's wife Merin-Da fell mortally ill after being exposed to Mobius' environment, and Luger made a choice that would forever affect the Legion's destiny: he ordered his people to re-enter the Zone via the portal out of his own volition, hoping to save his wife. Unfortunately for them, it was too late for Merin-Da, and she perished. To worsen matters, the portal had closed and the Legion was trapped once more, having to deal with a fresh onslaught of attacks from the other races also confined in the Zone. Amid the renewed Dark Legion/Nocturnus Clan war, Grandmaster Luger's children Lien-Da and Kragok were maturing into adolescence. They both still possessed a measure of innocence, however...until Imperator Ix made his next move..."

Mother is gone, thought a young Lien-Da as she watched Merin-Da's casket, adorned with intricate machine-like patterns, being lowered into the cremation chamber. Luger stood by her side, with Kragok on the other. They were in a large room inside the Dark Legion's fortress inside the Twilight Zone, inside the crematorium where the Legion honored its dead.

"Today we say our goodbyes to Merin-Da," said Luger with tears in his eyes as the casket continued sinking into the pit, "a bold and loyal soldier to our cause, a wise and intelligent woman, and an beautiful and loving wife. We will never forget you. Amen."

"Amen," repeated the hooded Legionnaires in attendance. Lien-Da couldn't keep herself from weeping as Merin-Da's body and casket were engulfed in bright orange flames, the glow illuminating the entire room. Kragok, for his part, simply stared as Merin-Da was cremated, not a hint of emotion on his face.

Days passed. Weeks. Months. Years. Life for the Grandmaster and his family gradually returned to normal and they resumed the duties of their daily lives. The war between the Dark Legion and the Nocturnus Clan picked up again immediately after the Legion's return, but slowly but surely, the Legion managed to gain headway against the Nocturnus by staging multiple fronts against them, forcing them to spread themselves thin in order to maintain their mini-empire, which at the time consisted of the Precursor Colony, the Kron Colony, the N'rrgal Colony, and Voxai Colony Beta. The Legion dispatched as many soldiers as possible to help Voxai Colony Alpha and the Zoah Colony maintain their right to self-government, as well as sending extra weapons and supplies to the colonies under the dominion of Imperator Ix.

"And thanks to the efforts of the rebels in the N'rrgal Colony, we've managed to push the Nocturnus back to a small islet near the edge of the colony," Luger said to the crowd of Legionnaires around him in the Legion's command center. "I'm also pleased to announce that, following the recent Kron escapade, we've also taken roughly two dozen Nocturnus prisoners--including Imperator Ix's second-in-command."

Lien-Da and Kragok, both now young teenagers, looked at each other in the front row as the rest of the Legionnaires cheered on the news. "Sounds like we're finally making some headway," muttered Kragok. "But if I were in charge, though, we'd have done this two years ago."

"Agreed," responded Lien-Da with a scowl, folding her arms and watching her father walk away from the podium while the Legionnaires dispersed to perform their duties. "Well, I'll see you later, brother. I'll be in my room."

"See you," said Kragok, saluting with his cybernetic left arm. Lien-Da walked through the passages on her way to her quarters, which was a small room in the back of the floating Legion complex. Along the way she passed many Legionnaires minding their own business, all of whom turned and saluted to her as she was the Kommissar. She exited an elevator, passed a storage room, and into the troop quarters. Most Legionnaires had to share rooms with each other in what were essentially small closets, but being the daughter of the Grandmaster allowed for special privileges, of course. She pressed the button to open her door once she reached the room and flicked on the light switch.

Suddenly she found a hand grabbing her arm as she stepped inside. "What the--?" she cried out, but a gloved hand covered her mouth and prevented her from screaming.

"Shhhhh," whispered the voice of the man behind her, "we don't want to cause a stir, now do we?" Struggling, Lien-Da turned to look at her attacker, who appeared to be just an ordinary Dark Legionnaire, hood and all. She felt a spray of air brush against her cheek, and her vision blurred and she passed out, falling limp in the Legionnaire's arms.

"Well, that was painless, wasn't it?" he said to no one in particular, hoisting the unconscious Kommissar over his head. He wheeled around and ran out of the hallway on his way to the hangar bay. He encountered no resistance as he dashed through the dimly-lit corridors and passageways, which was moderately surprising but welcome. When he emerged in the base's hangar he immediately saw a group of Legionnaires standing by a couple of silver saucers, chatting casually amongst themselves. Upon catching sight of the newcomer with the Grandmaster's daughter slung over his shoulder, the Legionnaires instinctively reached for their blasters around their belts, only to be individually hit by stun blasts from the gun of the undercover Nocturnus agent. Not stopping to admire his handiwork he made a beeline to the nearest saucer and roughly tossed Lien-Da into the passenger seat before revving up the saucer, closing the cockpit even as more Legionnaires poured in and took shots at him. One of their blasts impacted his saucer's chassis but it wasn't enough to stop him from flying through the airlock tube and into the starry blankness of the Twilight Cage, free at last. "Not bad for a mere sleeper agent," cackled the echidna to himself as he flew toward Nocturne.

When Lien-Da came to, she was very much alone. She blinked several times, the memory of the unknown assailant coming back to her at once. What happened to me...? she wondered to herself, looking around. She was in a small dark room, the only illumination coming from cyan and orange lighting strips on the walls and ceilings. She didn't recognize the place at all...but could hazard a guess as to where she was. "Oh, no, no NO!" she screamed, staggering to her feet and rushing at the door, feeling a surge of panic surge through her body. She slammed her hands against the door and punched several times, the impact having no effect on the thick metal. Finally, defeated, she fell backward onto the ground, her knuckles raw and bloody.

She sat for the next several minutes, clutching her pain-ridden hands and crying hysterically, half from pain and half from sheer terror. She had heard about Nocturne in the past from her father, but...never did she imagine that one day she'd find herself kidnapped by a Nocturnus agent from her own home and spirited away to a cell to rot. Finally she got up and attempted to kick the door in, the blows having no more effect on the door than before. Right before her fifth try, however, the door swung open to admit a black-suited Nocturnus soldier, the blue insignias on his armor glowing with an almost insectoid look in the darkness. "For crying out loud, there's no need to make such a racket," he said, aiming his hand-mounted blaster at her quivering form on the cold floor. Lien-Da scurried to her feet in a panic and threw herself at him, only to be shot in the stomach with a low-powered blast from his thick cannon, just enough to briefly stun. The shot knocked her back against the rear wall. "That's enough!" he shouted angrily. "Do you understand?" He received no response. "I'll take that as a 'yes'. Now behave yourself, hear? And you needn't worry; if Luger cooperates and does as we demand then he'll see you again safe and sound."

With that he slammed the door and left, leaving the stunned Lien-Da to curl up into a ball and whimper on the ground, terrified for her life. One minute passed, then another, until finally the door opened once more and a pair of Nocturnus soldiers swooped in. One was the High Praetorian guard who had threatened her before while the other was a flying Decurion armed with a pair of sinister-looking blades. "Hey, wake up," called the Decurion to her. "Hey!" he shouted again when she didn't respond. He shrugged and rolled his eyes under his mask, while the Praetorian went and prodded her with his finger. She shook her head, regained a small amount of her composure and willingly got up (albeit at gunpoint), shivering but complacent.

"That's better," said the Praetorian, who roughly grabbed her shoulder and pushed her toward the door, his cannon on the small of her back. The Decurion followed, accompanying them on their walk to the elevator. While they were halfway there Lien-Da, fed up with her treatment already, screamed and elbowed the Praetorian in the face, knocking him to the ground before he had the chance to react. She shoved the Decurion against a wall jumped on top of the Praetorian, punching his torso repeatedly, before suddenly a sharp pain on her back caused her to cease her attack and fall backward, writhing in pain. The Decurion stood over her, holding his blades.

"Don't even think of doing something like that again," he warned dangerously, pointing one of his blades at her. "Get up and keep moving." She did so, crying and sputtering from pain, and allowed the Praetorian to grab her arms and walk her toward the elevator. Moments later the three emerged into a broad room with a tall-ceiling, featuring the same glowing aspects as the rest of the fortress, including a transparent floor with dim blue lighting underneath. The entire room was bathed in blackness, nonetheless, and in the very middle of the room sitting in an elegant golden throne was Imperator Ix himself, who, upon seeing his prisoner arrive, got up and floated over, scepter in hand.

"Welcome," he said, waving his arm for the guards to be dismissed. Lien-Da looked up through tear-soaked eyes, jolts of pain still racing through her back from where the Decurion had sliced through her flesh. She locked eyes with Ix, gazed into those solid blue glowing eyes, and shrieked in horror. She was in front of Imperator Ix, the most dangerous man she had ever heard of. She was at his mercy, and mercy was something he had in short supply.

"G-Get away f-f-from me," she cried feebly, but Ix lowed himself to her level and grabbed her arm, pulling her to her feet with some effort. Wordlessly he floated back up and guided her to a chair next to his throne, Lien-Da herself being completely unable to resist at that point. He sat in his own seat and tapped a button, causing a holographic screen to appear in front of them featuring Grandmaster Luger himself.

"Lien-Da!" he shouted upon seeing his daughter, relieved to see her in once piece. He then looked up at Ix, fire burning in his normally calm eyes. "What is the meaning of this, Pir'Oth?" he questioned with the unmistakable tone of hatred in his voice.

"I didn't realize we were on a first-name basis, Grandmaster," said Ix with mild annoyance, reclining in his throne. He moved his scepter in such a way so that Lien-Da's neck was caught on the C-shaped end of his staff, after which pulled her in front of his throne, which she did voluntarily. "But I'll let that slide. This ill-behaved child is your daughter, correct?"

Luger's normally kind and warm smile was little more than a grim slash across his muzzle that communicated nothing but contempt. "Yes, she is, you monster."

"Oh, please, let's at least be civilized about this," said Ix with an air of boredom about the whole affair. "After all, both of us have something the other wants. You have my Procurator and several of my men. I, on the other hand, have your twelve-year-old child. Can you see where I'm going with this, Grandmaster?"

"I can," replied Luger with a solemn expression. "Very well. I shall send a transport with your men at once."

"Hahaha!" laughed Ix, relinquishing his staff's hold on Lien-Da's neck. "Straight and to the point! Excellent! Thanks for being so...cooperative, Grandmaster. I'll be anticipating your shuttle. Be here within the hour."

Ix terminated the connect and patted Lien-Da on the head. "See? That was easier than even I thought. Now come, it's time to go perform a little transaction." He led Lien-Da out of the room and into the elevator, and together the two made the short journey to a large landing platform outside Nocturne, with Ix jabbing her forcefully with his scepter when she delayed. Accompanied by several Praetorian soldiers Ix waited patiently with his prisoner on her knees at his side until Luger's ship flew within view, at which time Nocturne's repulsor field deactivated to allow the ship entrance to the fortress. The sleek silver craft made its way to the platform and touched down, the lift underneath opening. Luger himself exited first, followed by a group of Legionnaires and the eighteen Nocturne Triarius prisoners, all stripped of their armor suits and bound in cuffs.

Luger walked up to Ix and pointed at his daughter. "Hand her over," he commanded. Ix shook his head.

"Nah, I don't trust you. Give me my men first and then we'll talk," he said with a smug smile. The sweat-drenched Lien-Da looked up in renewed panic. We're in the heart of their base, Lien-Da realized with sheer horror. If Ix breaks his deal, then...there's no way for Father to save me!

Luger locked eyes with Ix, gritted his teeth, and relented. He bent his head and gestured for the prisoners to come, which they did. The Nocturnus hostages walked by him and were quickly received by their brethren. At the end of the line was Shade, who stopped to look at Lien-Da on her way inside Nocturne. She shrugged and continued walking. "Thank you, Grandmaster Luger!" said Ix enthusiastically, grabbing Lien-Da's shirt collar and tossing her in front of Luger. He shouted her name and bent over, hugging the trembling girl and whispering that it'd all be okay. "Aw, how touching," said Ix with a smirk. "I very much appreciate your kindness in returning these soldiers to me. In return for your generosity, I'll give your happy little family there a merciful death."

Ix's Praetorian guards stepped forward and aimed their blasters at Luger and his daughter. As Ix laughed maniacally the Grandmaster grabbed Lien-Da and threw her backward to protect her, then drew a blaster of his own and shot Ix in the chest. The Imperator roared in anger as the energy bolt impacted his armor and flew backward into his men, impacting them and knocking them down. He shook his head and looked up just in time to see the Grandmaster disappear into his shuttle and fly off, just managing to escape before Nocturne's repulsor field activated again. "Hmph. I seem to have underestimated you, Grandmaster," said Ix. "But next time you will not be so lucky."

Lien-Da sat on the floor in the rear of the shuttle, shaking and crying. Luger was bent over her, whispering that everything was all right. "Lien-Da! Please calm down," he said with a hand on her shoulder. "It's all over."

Still shivering she looked up, her eyes red and puffy from crying. "I know!" she said in a low voice, pushing her father away. Luger closed his eyes, nodded, and walked away, giving her some time alone to gather herself. She sat up, rubbing her eyes as well as the wound on her back. You filthy Nocturnus goons. I will have my revenge if so help me it's the last thing I do.

Gae-Na's eyes were wide as Moritori Rex finished his story. The end was abrupt, but she continued staring long after he was finished speaking. "That...explains at lot," she said after a long pause. "But I still don't know what to do about it!"

"I can't tell you the answer to that," said Moritori, leaning back and pulling his cover back over himself. "You'll have to ponder it by yourself. Now please leave me be."

Gae-Na nodded, thanked him for telling her the story, and left. I can't believe Lien-Da never told me, she thought. But for her own good I can't let her do this. I have to tell Shade or someone, regardless of what she thinks.

As Gae-Na left to go speak to Shade, Moritori rested his head on his pillow, conflicting thoughts swirling around in his head. "I never wanted it to come to this," he said sadly to himself. "I never wanted to jeopardize the Legion's chances like this. But Lien-Da needed guidance, and..." He paused. "...I wanted her to believe I still cared for her, despite the fact that the plan was doomed to fail from the beginning. Lien-Da, dear...I'm sorry."
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Re: Rise of the Dark Brotherhood 3: The Ultimate Gizoid

Postby Werekitty119 » Tue May 29, 2012 1:08 am

Awww.... poor, conflicted Moritori.....

I salute you, sir Shadow Emperor. You have made me love- not one, not two, not even three, but FIVE characters I formerly disliked!
You won't recognise me. You won't realise it's me. You might not even know who I am. But the Kat came back, you thought I was a goner but the Kat came back, I just couldn't stay awayyyyy.....
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Re: Rise of the Dark Brotherhood 3: The Ultimate Gizoid

Postby The Shadow Emperor » Tue May 29, 2012 2:07 pm

Werekitty119 wrote:Awww.... poor, conflicted Moritori.....

I salute you, sir Shadow Emperor. You have made me love- not one, not two, not even three, but FIVE characters I formerly disliked!

And who might those be?
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Re: Rise of the Dark Brotherhood 3: The Ultimate Gizoid

Postby Werekitty119 » Wed May 30, 2012 3:02 am

The Shadow Emperor wrote:
Werekitty119 wrote:Awww.... poor, conflicted Moritori.....

I salute you, sir Shadow Emperor. You have made me love- not one, not two, not even three, but FIVE characters I formerly disliked!

And who might those be?


Gae-Na, the Baron, Mighty, Ray, Moritori.
You won't recognise me. You won't realise it's me. You might not even know who I am. But the Kat came back, you thought I was a goner but the Kat came back, I just couldn't stay awayyyyy.....
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Re: Rise of the Dark Brotherhood 3: The Ultimate Gizoid

Postby The Shadow Emperor » Wed May 30, 2012 10:23 pm

Werekitty119 wrote:
The Shadow Emperor wrote:
Werekitty119 wrote:Awww.... poor, conflicted Moritori.....

I salute you, sir Shadow Emperor. You have made me love- not one, not two, not even three, but FIVE characters I formerly disliked!

And who might those be?


Gae-Na, the Baron, Mighty, Ray, Moritori.

One of my goals is to make you like the characters, so I'm glad to hear it! :D And what's even nicer is that three of those guys will be in the next chapter! And as for Gae-Na and Moritori Rex...to be honest, they were pretty much stock characters beforehand in, y'know, the Penders era. When I made the decision to include them in the story I wanted them to actually do stuff and show some personality unlike before. So it's a big compliment to me that I my story encouraged you to give them a second look, 'cause that means I must be doing at least something right. Thank you again.

Alas, no milestone Chapter 70 today...but I've go the next best thing: five teasers for Chapter 75!

*A personal conflict that's been heating up between two characters will finally come to a head, and the outcome may surprise you
*You'll finally learn why the subtitle is called "The Ultimate Gizoid".
*Good ol' Dr. Eggman finally makes his next sinister move.
*There will be a huge life-changing event for one of the main characters that will forever change their destiny.
*And most importantly--it'll lay the groundwork for the formation of a brand new team. Remember that battle-weary Shade image I once posted? You'll find out what the deal with that was.

EDIT: Chris000, here's my response to your feedback:


Chris000 wrote:Chapter 5 Review:

I thought that the introduction for Dr. F in this chapter was a little bit sudden. It's like 'there he was' was the first statement of the chapter. I think that he could have used a bit more of a darker entrance since he is a villain. This was a shorter chapter than those before it, though I think I can expect that they'll get longer from this point on!

Oh, I agree. He's a scary guy with scary goals and scary design. He deserved more than the "welp here's Fini" line at the beginning, and I was thinking about adding something along the lines of starting the chapter with the Nocturnus soldier arriving and then revealing that the villain he meets with is Finitevus after giving the reader several paragraphs to think about who he might be.

And on the chapter length thing, yeah, they do get a great deal longer after that. On average recent ones are much more in-depth and intricate than the first several chapters I wrote.


Chris000 wrote:I love the hypocrisy that comes out of the good doctor's mouth!

"I want peace and quiet!" *Throws hammer at wall*

Good chapter again; it's a little bit longer than the last one. It serves as good rising action, though I wonder if the E-120 bots could just as easily be captured like the original Gizoid model was.

Thanks! The impression I always got from Sonic Battle was that the E-121s (E-120 in this story) were pretty weak compared to the actual Gizoid--I believe Emerl even refers to them at one point as "fodder." All they do is harass you constantly throughout the game and none of the characters seem to give any indication that the robots are anything more than pushovers, so I kept the "weakling" depiction in mind while writing for the Phis in this story.

Now Gemerl? He's a different story. I'd like to talk more about him buuuuut...he's sorta going to be a major player in the next chapter, so I'll talk about him later.


Chris000 wrote:Chapter 8 Thoughts:

Not as dark as you really made it out to be. The worst is that Knuckles was caught off guard, got kicked in the head, and Chaotix basically got overwhelmed and captured. Nobody really died, so I wouldn't really call it dark. Unless of course you were referencing the fact that it took place at night!

You know something? I wonder what the floating Island's cruising height and velocity is. I mean, if the island has no independent means of propulsion, and only goes on the wind, what happens when a storm comes along? Warm waters like the South Pacific generate very powerful storms and monsoons, and the Island's path takes it past what we know as India. I wonder if the subject has ever been covered in the comics before.

On another note, shouldn't people be developing countermeasures to warp rings? Maybe devices that can detect when one is being used or a forcefeld that blocks that energy from getting in? It didn't stop them from throwing nanites out to solve just about any problem.

Eh...it was darker compared to the other chapters. But I guess I'll just steal your explanation and go with "it was nighttime, therefore darker."

About your second question, I honestly don't know. All I know is that Angel Island's path brings it over Downunda every time, and somehow it always ends up on that path even after getting knocked off course by Eggman. Maybe it's magic.

And the warp ring thing...I actually have given that some thought. Again, I'd go into it more, but...I think I'll just let the next chapter answer that for you. :wink:
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Postby Werekitty119 » Mon Jun 04, 2012 2:58 am

Hmmm..... well, if the Baron AND Eggman appear..... OHOHOHO!
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Chapter 71: Break-In

Death Egg, robotics lab, evening

The four Nocturnus hostages worked briskly and efficiently, constantly reminded of their predicament by the thick electroshock collars clamped around their necks (and in the event they forgot their position, there were a dozen armed Egg Swats positioned around the room). The partially-disassembled golden-plated Phi robot was resting on a pedestal with its chestplate open exposing its inner circuitry. Armed only with tools and their innate knowledge of Nocturnus machinery, the prisoners worked in absolute silence as they refurbished and reprogrammed the robot to suit Dr. Eggman's nefarious desires.

"And how are you four fellows doing on this oh-so-fine evening?" asked the Eggman himself with the deceitful air of a gentleman as he suddenly swept into the assembly area, hands behind his back.

The Praetorian nervously looked up from his work. "W-Well...pretty good so far, but...we just gotta re-check the algorithms...you don't want it turning on you like that other Gizoid, do you?"

Eggman put his hand on the Noctunus soldier's shoulder and leaned over, examining the fruits of his captives' labor. The Praetorian shuddered and tugged at his collar, though Eggman took no notice. "Hmm...mmm-hmm...hmm..." mumbled Eggman through closed lips. The Praetorian shut his eyes, waiting for the final verdict that could very well be the deciding factor of his and his comrades' survival.

"Very impressive," said Eggman, and the Praetorian let out a sigh of relief. "You've not only succeeded in overhauling and reprogramming its A.I. in under a few hours, but you also went the extra mile and buffed out the dents in its armor! I owe you a debt of gratitude, don't I?"

The four soldiers looked at each other in confusion. "I...g-guess. Maybe you could let us go now?" asked the Nocturne Hastatus hopefully, arms akimbo.

Eggman's smile melted into nothingness, and at once a collective shudder went through the quartet of Nocturnus men. The Nocturne Equites quickly shushed the Hastatus with a dirty look while the Nocturnus Scout shuffled his feet and tried to look as innocent as possible. "Ah-ah-ah, you shouldn't be so presumptuous, my little dreadhead friends," said Eggman wickedly, pulling out his remote and pressing the low-power shock button. "or I might get the wrong idea, have a bit of temper, and fry you all on the spot." His prisoners fell to the ground, twitching in pain.

"Sir? I have the status update you requested," said Snively, casually walking in through the doorway. He immediately noticed the four writhing echidnas on the ground by the robot's table. "What are you...?" he began, raising an eyebrow.

"Eh, it's nothing. Just teaching my captives some manners, is all," replied Eggman, waving a hand dismissively as he shut the Phi's chestplate and snatched the stack of papers from his nephew's outstretched hand. "Come," said Eggman, beckoning for the golden-plated Phi robot to get up and follow. As they exited the doctor turned to the nearest Egg Swat guard. "These Nocturnus have finished their job, so I want you to go toss them back in their cell. Got it?"

The tall black and red robot saluted obediently. "Yes, sir," it said in a monotonous tone.

"Actually, on second thought," added Eggman, backtracking into the room, "I am about to exterminate the rest of their kind, so just toss them in an incinerator or something." The doctor then pranced joyfully out of the room, whistling a tune.

"You...have got to be kidding me," said the Nocturnus Scout on the ground. "So much for his debt of gratitude."

"We might as well be dead anyway," said the Nocturne Equites dejectedly as an Egg Swat roughly picked him off the floor and dragged him away.

Meanwhile, Dr. Eggman, Snively, and the Phi robot walked through the Death Egg's hallways. The doctor sauntered along, with Snively "You seem to be in a good mood, sir," observed Snively. "I can't say I was particularly expecting that, given how the Final Egg Blaster plan turned out to be a total bust thanks to your inviting Sonic aboard."

"Bah, that was just a tiny setback--no harm done, really, since in the end I still got my Gizoid, or at least a decently built facsimile. But besides, I have plenty of reason to rejoice, my dear lackey!" boomed Eggman, patting Snively on the head and resuming his reading of the status report on the clipboard, a broad smile slowly etching its way across his face. "So, all ten D.E.L. chapters did as they were told, correct?"

"I believe so," answered Snively, wrinkling his nose. "They sent us roughly a thousand units in all, just as you ordered. The shipments are being unpacked as we speak."

His master nodded. "Good, it's nice to know that my cyborg armies aren't as lazy as they act--they just sometimes need a little, y'know, disincentive to get them motivated. And on an unrelated note, was my Chaos Emerald successfully located?" asked Eggman as the two rounded a corner.

"Yes, it was found in the wreckage of the central engine room by the Egg Mite repair crew," informed Snively with boredom.

"Place it in the auxiliary engines, then," ordered Eggman. "I want us back in the air for the Angel Island invasion tonight."

"Wait, what?" questioned Snively, coming to a halt. "You cannot be serious. This place is practically falling apart at the seams! We just fell out of the sky and have barely even begun to patch the station back together, and now you want to--!"

"Oh shut up, Snively," snapped Eggman without looking up from his clipboard. "If everything goes according to plan--which it will--then we will only be airborne for a few hours. I'm confident the internal Power Ring matrix will keep us intact until then, and meanwhile, we have more than enough Egg Swats to overrun our enemies with little effort."

"And say your plan doesn't go off without a hitch? What if, oh, say Sonic shows up?" asked Snively worriedly.

"The rodent doesn't concern me at this moment in time," said Eggman bluntly.

Snively sighed. Here we go again, he thought furiously. But he kept this to himself and looked at the Phi robot, walking alongside them with emotionless red eyes. "Fine, then. Now out of curiosity, what were you planning on doing with this thing?"

"All will be revealed shortly, Snively." They stepped into a pitch-black storage room, the only illumination coming from the hallway lighting behind them. Eggman activated the ceiling light with his handheld remote, flooding the room with light and revealing a gigantic metal snakelike behemoth. The giant robot had an empty Eggmobile socket at the top, in the middle of a large wide body section with cylindrical control mechanisms on the sides (both of which featured a detachable giant gray metal hand). The tail end of the mech was long and segmented, curling backward like a serpentine tail. "Feast your eyes on the Hyper Egg Robo," said the doctor.

Meanwhile, beneath the pleasant evening sky, a pair of Chaotix emerged from a Warp Ring outside the Oil Ocean Refinery, near which the Death Egg rested on its landing platform. "Welp, that's definitely the Death Egg," stated Mighty the Armadillo, hands on hips while observing the colossal egg-shaped battle station adorned with Eggman's likeness on the front.

"W-Wow..." mumbled Ray, fur standing on end. "Th-Th-That thing is huge..."

"Sure is," agreed Mighty, twirling the Warp Ring around his index and middle fingers. "Now let's get inside, find Eggy, and teach him a lesson about enslaving others." He tossed it in the air, and it expanded in midair, but no portal manifested itself within the ring. "Waitaminute...I thought Warp Rings were supposed to take you anywhere you wanted?" questioned Mighty confusedly.

"M-Maybe there's s-s-some sort of i-interference?" wondered Ray.

Mighty shrugged. "I guess...I suppose we'll just have to ask the good doctor after we defeat him and take him captive. Anyway..." Mighty touched the ring, thinking of a new destination. This time the ring glowed and produced an opening as it was supposed to, and the two stepped into it, finding themselves at the top of a tall tower overlooking the rest of the refinery as well as the Death Egg itself. "Okay, Ray? I need you to grab ahold of me and fly us over to the Death Egg," said Mighty, pointing at the station. "Think you can get us that far? It's only about a hundred meters."

"I-I think s-so," said Ray. The flying squirrel jumped into the air and spread his arms, catching a draft of air under his patagium and taking flight. Mighty took a step back, ran forward, and leaped gracefully off the tall platform and grabbed Ray's hand. The two friends soared through the air, aided by a light evening breeze, until they reached the silver outer hull of the Death Egg. Ray let go of Mighty and the armadillo grabbed a handhold on the station's side. He drew back a fist and punched the wall, leaving a centimeter-deep dent in the metal. He followed this with a few more small direct hits, until the dent was roughly an inch thick, and then with another, more powerful swing, this time leaving a fist-shaped impression. For the final punch he drew back his arm as far as possible and slammed his knuckles into the weakened metal, and the panel, crumpled like tinfoil, detached from the hull entirely and flew into the interior of of the base, slamming into the inner wall. Mighty then climbed in through the opening, followed by Ray. They found themselves in a silver hallway, completely devoid of any hostile presence.

"Heh...this reminds me of our EggDome invasion back in the day," said Mighty with nostalgia as they made their way through the curved hall. "'Course, it wasn't that long ago..."

"H-Hey, I think I see someone!" said Ray, pointing ahead at a crowd of robots.

Mighty nodded. "Yep...looks like it," he said, sprinting forward to smash them before they noticed them and alerted the doctor to their presence. The rear Egg Swat turned its head to view the oncoming armadillo, only to have its optical sensors blinded by a fist. Mighty followed through with a spinning kick to the midsection, the blow slicing the red robot in half through the middle.

"Intruder alert!" shouted the lead Egg Swats, each tossing its "cargo" on the ground in front of itself and pivoting around to fire shots at the intruder. Mighty effortlessly dodged laser bursts as he pummeled through the robots like a battering ram, reducing them to little more than sparking piles of scrap. When the last Egg Swat was destroyed, Mighty looked around, examining his handiwork. He then discovered something he hadn't noticed before--there were four unconscious black-suited echidnas on the ground nearby.

"What the heck?" questioned Mighty as Ray ran over by his side. "Who are these guys, and why were they on Eggman's base getting carried around by robots?"

Suddenly Eggman's twin mechanical minions Orbot and Cubot scooted out through a doorway, then saw Mighty and Ray. Orbot grabbed his partner and dragged him backward before the two noticed them. "Eh, what's the big idea, homie?" questioned Cubot.

"Those were Mobians!" whispered Orbot, panicking. "Oh, dear...the boss will be so displeased if he finds these two here..."

"Well, why don't we send 'em packing?" suggested Cubot.

Orbot brightened up considerably. "That's not actually a bad idea," he told his yellow counterpart. He reached out toward the nearest control panel, typed in a code, and began speaking. "Security, please report to these coordinates..." he began.

Mighty bent over and tapped one of the echidnas. "Hey! You all right?" he asked while Ray went to go check on the others.

"N...No..." stuttered the Nocturne Praetorian, his eyelids fluttering open. He blinked and looked up into Mighty's warm but concerned face. "W-Who are you...?" he asked.

"I'm Mighty. Lemme help you up," he said, pulling the Praetorian to his feet. "You guys are prisoners, aren't you?" he asked, putting his hand on the echidna's shoulder.

"Yep," replied the Nocturnus soldier. "C-Can you take our blasted shock collars off?"

"Shock collars? Gee whiz, I didn't know Eggman stooped that lowl!" said Mighty, tearing the collar off with no effort. He then went over to the other prisoners and did the same. They sat down, rubbing their necks.

Ray turned his head to look down the hallway and shrieked. He ran behind Mighty, shivering. "What's...?" asked Mighty, but Ray's expression did the trick. Mighty looked ahead and saw a gigantic silvery metal Sonic robot stomping down the hallway, nearly three times the height of an average Mobian. The four former hostages cowered behind Mighty for protection as the metal monstrosity approached, its sharp head-mounted spines carving grooves in the ceiling.

Silver Sonic III saw Mighty and Ray immediately as it made its way to find the Death Egg's invaders. Its eyes blinked as it locked on to its targets and lunged forward, ready to apprehend and destroy the trespassers. "All right, big boy...you want a fight?" said Mighty, breaking into a run, "Well you'll get a fight!"



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Re: Rise of the Dark Brotherhood 3: The Ultimate Gizoid

Postby The Shadow Emperor » Wed Jun 13, 2012 8:44 pm

I hate to say it, but I honestly don't feel like writing anything right now. I will continue the story soon, but for the time being...meh. So as a tiny consolation here's some solicits to whet your appetites.

Chapter 72 wrote:Chapter 72: Compromised Operation
Thrash the Tasmanian Devil has succeeded in breaching Nocturne's defenses...only to find the Brotherhood of Guardians hot on his tail. With his one window of opportunity for revenge slipping away, will Thrash succeed in his goal, or will the Brotherhood capture and bring him to justice?

Chapter 73 wrote:Chapter 73: A Last Chance
Mighty the Armadillo and his friend Ray the Flying Squirrel broke into the Death Egg Mark II, and after freeing Dr. Eggman's four Nocturnus hostages they now find themselves attacked by the gigantic Silver Sonic III. Mighty must find a way to quickly defeat the metallic menace and get to the evil doctor before time runs out, but the sinister Eggman has a trick up his sleeve...

Chapter 74 wrote:Chapter 74: The Survivors
Confronted on all sides, Thrash has little choice but to explain his recent actions. What dark secrets regarding his past will he reveal? And more importantly, will he listen to reason, or will the vengeful Grandmaster Lien-Da intervene before a compromise can be reached?

Chapter 75 wrote:Chapter 75: *Title pending*
It's an event 70+ chapters in the making--the ultimate, no-holds barred battle for the fate of Angel Island. Dr. Eggman's Death Egg looms over the airborne landmass as the inhabitants declare war against one another. The players are set and the stage is ready, and as the Dark Legion and Nocturnus Clan's rivalry finally comes to a head, Dr. Eggman's latest, most powerful weapon to date is unleashed! Will the Legion and Nocturnus succeed in mending the fences to fight a common foe, or will the Eggman Empire manage to reconquer Angel Island? Get ready for the explosive finale to The Ultimate Gizoid saga!
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Postby The Shadow Emperor » Fri Jun 29, 2012 8:45 pm

We're back, baby! So sorry for the wait, but I at last present Chapter 72! Only three more after this and we reach 75! Sweet, huh? :P

Chapter 72: Specter in the Shadows

Nocturne, armory, early evening

"All right, boys, are we going to do this the hard way or the easy way?" inquired the Guardian named Spectre, stepping out from behind a heap of supply crates in the Nocturne armory. Without any effort or strain, he tapped into his link to the Chaos Force once more and summoned the distinctive green glow of Chaos Energy which crackling and fizzled around his hands, a lethal weapon when wielded by a skilled user.

Thrash the Tasmanian Devil looked up, vision still blurry from being blasted against the wall. Although his head was still ringing from the impact he willed himself to stand, facing the representative from the species he hated. "I--I--shoot the freaking echidna!" bellowed Thrash, stumbling and falling from disorientation. Rat and his men each fired several shots from their silver blasters in rapid sequence at the cloaked echidna, who simply held up a hand and created a circular emerald-colored energy barrier with his hand. The lasers harmlessly impacted the surface of the shield and were absorbed.

"Is that all you can do? How very feeble; I would have expected more from the great Dingo Regime," taunted Spectre, shaking his head. "Now it's my turn."

"Yeah, let's not give Mr. Shady here a chance to use more of his voodoo," said Rat nervously to the rest of his teammates. "Men, attack!"

The three dingo footsoldiers roared and charged, weapons blazing, intending to overwhelm their adversary before he could launch another attack against them. Spectre maintained his Chaos-powered shield with his left hand, which continued to deflect the onslaught of lasers, while with his right hand he blasted the oncoming soldiers with three well-aimed bursts of Chaos energy fired in succession. Spectre marched forward over the smoking unconscious forms of the three dingoes, his crimson eyes glowing in the darkness.

Thrash rose shakily to his feet, muttering various echidna-related curses under his breath. "I think we're done here," he said, grasping his Warp Ring and throwing it into the air.

"I don't think so," said Spectre, who knocked the ring from the air with another green energy beam, continuing his menacing approach.

Thrash turned to Rat after staring in disbelief at the Warp Ring bouncing away into one of the dark crevices of the room. "Use one of our bombs and blast the door of the place open," he said out of the corner of his mouth. "I'll handle this guy."

As Spectre prepared to fry both of the intruders with spears of Chaos energy the bulky Tasmanian devil opened his mouth and roared loudly, sending shockwaves of sound blasting directly at Spectre. Hit at point-blank range with his Chaos shield completely ineffective against sound waves, Spectre flew backwards and collided with a rack of Nocturne Praetorian blasters which fell on top of him while Thrash lunged forward with a flurry of punches. Meanwhile Rat snatched one of the spherical explosives from one of the fallen backpacks and ran over to the massive metal double-doors blocking their exit point. Rat altered the settings a bit on the detonator, setting for short-cycle detonation as well as a lower power, then deposited the device at the base of the doors and dove for cover behind a rack of Gizoid body shells. Thrash followed suit, while Spectre blasted the rack off of him, floating and glowing with energy while his black cloak billowed behind him.

Spectre grabbed the Gizoid shell rack with his psychic Chaos grip, throwing it aside and uncovering Thrash and Rat. "You're coming with me, boys," he said, aiming his palm at the two intruders.

Behind the floating Guardian the detonation device went off with a bang, blasting a gigantic gaping hole in the doorway as well as knocking down or outright blowing away every rack and box in the vicinity. Distracted, Spectre looked to his right, only to discover himself near a tower of supply crates which fell on top of him, burying him from head to toe. Thrash and Rat got up, coughing from the dust blown around from the explosion. "You go and get a head start," said Rat, bending down to brush debris off the backs of one of his comrades. "I've gotta get these men to safety, so we need you to get a head start and take out any guards you run into!"

"Got it, mate," responded Thrash gruffly, leaping into action. He catapulted himself over the rubble blocking the exit and flew out the opening, finding a few shaking Nocturnus guards standing outside, wondering what the blazes just happened to their armory.

"Freeze!" shouted the guards, aiming their blasters. Thrash cackled maniacally before blowing them backwards with his sonic roar.

"Ahhh...that felt good. Blowing the echidnas all up or not, revenge is sweet!" said Thrash happily, kicking their limp forms out of the way before running through the dimly-lit atrium and making his way into the exit corridor...and found it full of onrushing Nocturne High Praetorians and Decurions, the elite guards of the fortress. "Bring it on, chumps!" shouted Thrash as the first Praetorian skidded to a stop in front of him, only to receive a punch to the face. Thrash grabbed his limp form and threw it at the Decurions, knocking them out of the air and causing them to land on their comrades, resulting in a huge pileup of disoriented bodies blocking the hallway. Thrash dodged the energy blasts shot by the few standing troopers and punched his way through the crowd of Nocturnus soldiers, enjoying the sound of their armor crunching against his beefy fists and relishing their screams of terror. Every last echidna who stood in his way had his or her faceplate punched in, or was kicked in the stomach, or blasted away with a sonic roar, or even grabbed by the torso and used as a living battering ram. In seconds the purple Tasmanian devil had cleared himself a path through the hallway and he quickly ran through, arriving in the middle of another atrium which had a few elevators and more hallways directly ahead.

Thrash gaped in befuddlement. "Geez...I was so intent on using the Warp Ring I didn't even plan for something like this," he said angrily to himself. "This is just absolute garbage! How in the world did these dang echidnas know we were coming?!"

Suddenly the silhouettes of two more echidnas materialized in front of Thrash, interrupting his rant. "Well," said Sojourner, immediately pelting Thrash with a beam of Chaos Energy from his hand, "you're not as clever as you think you are." Thrash barely managed to avoid the blast as it narrowly singed his purple fur.

"Take this, you monster!" shouted Thunderhawk, shooting a laser of his own. Thrash similarly dodged this before wheeling around and attempting to run the other way, only to find the Guardian Sabre blocking the armory hallway.

"Surprise!" said Sabre, punching Thrash in the stomach. Although the blow nearly was enough to knock the wind out of him Thrash inhaled a gulp of air, performed a backwards somersault and landed behind Thunderhawk and Sojourner. With all three Guardians in front of him he released the air from his lungs in the form of one last, powerful sonic scream, blasting them backwards. Then he felt a sharp pain between his shoulder blades and he fell to the ground, stunned. He looked up and found himself staring into the eyes of Shade, the leader of the Nocturnus Clan who was holding a Praetorian blaster which was aimed at the space between his eyes.

"Your little crusade was over before it began," said Shade. Thrash reached and, attempting to grab her ankle but found himself shot in the back with her blaster on the stun setting. Thrash's eyes rolled back in his head and he slumped to the ground, defeated.



Next chapter, as you should know from the teaser summaries, we'll be returning for the third part of Mighty and Ray's adventure. Hope you guys enjoyed the first chapter in a while, and I'll try my hardest to keep to a tighter schedule next time.

And let me just add a little reminder that feedback is welcome, everyone! I'd really love to hear from you! :D
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Postby Chris000 » Mon Jul 02, 2012 2:56 am

Ch 12: This is a good chapter that I feel shows some rising action towards the possibility of a gizoid threat. Why would Elias refer to his sister in a full name? Is this simply a political procedure? I'm not saying that it's wrong; perhaps it was simply procedure. Julie Su's testimony makes it seem like some of the members of Chaotix were actually killed during the attack. She clearly stated that Knuckles was knocked out, but her wording seems to implied that the Chaotix died during the attack.

Also, the diction seems to reflect the political setting quite well. Very little contractions seen.

Ch 13: The Gizoid entry seems kind of pushed off to the side. They just appear into the scene, as if it were a passive background movement. 'Howdy folks! Just here to pick up our property. Hope you don't mind'. I would have had a couple of lines detailing the approaching sound of the robots and the characters wondering about what they were hearing. Now, Bunnie on the other hand really turned up the heat. Her cannon wasn't good enough for her and she decided to behead a couple of them with the sword (that Antoine just happens to carry around with him).

And wouldn't you know it, Security was slow to arrive. Were the castle guards trained aboard the USS Enterprise or something? (Star Trek joke; hope you got it!)

Ch 14: Hmm... I always wondered what sort of small cataclysm occurred when Angel Island crashed into the sea. We saw in the Sonic Adventure games that the island makes a sizable wave that could be considered tsunami size. I shudder to think about people living in coastal regions, especially those in the Downundan/South Asian regions. Instead of 'bi-barreled', simply putting 'double-barreled' would have sounded a bit better. Nobody calls them bi-barreled shotguns, do they?

And another thing: Doc Fen MUST have these things timed in his office because he always manages to step through that ring right on time. Gotta love that man's punctuality!

OK, one more for tonight, and I'll do some more tomorrow.

Ch 15: I think that some of Knuckles' dialogue at the beginning sounded a little... weak for him actually. I think that he should have defended his position right off the bat and refused to help, even when threatened with torture, because a person like Knuckles wouldn't abandon his post even with some schmoozing. I see you throwing around some mythology terms like Argus, Charybdis, and Scylla, but given the other works of yours that I have read, that isn't turning out to be a very big surprise anymore. How much greek mythology is there on Mobius, I wonder...
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Re: Rise of the Dark Brotherhood 3: The Ultimate Gizoid

Postby The Shadow Emperor » Fri Jul 06, 2012 8:26 pm

Hooray, feedback! This never fails to make me very happy, peoples. And when I'm happy, I tend to release chapters more often. *winkwinknudgenudge*

Chris000 wrote:Ch 12: This is a good chapter that I feel shows some rising action towards the possibility of a gizoid threat. Why would Elias refer to his sister in a full name? Is this simply a political procedure? I'm not saying that it's wrong; perhaps it was simply procedure. Julie Su's testimony makes it seem like some of the members of Chaotix were actually killed during the attack. She clearly stated that Knuckles was knocked out, but her wording seems to implied that the Chaotix died during the attack.

Also, the diction seems to reflect the political setting quite well. Very little contractions seen.

I honestly don't know why I had Elias refer to her like that, but I suppose the formal political setting makes it viable. And as for the Chaotix thing, yeah, I do need to go and make it clearer. I'll fix it once I reach Chapter 12 in the revised chapters thread. And thanks for the compliments!

Chris000 wrote:Ch 13: The Gizoid entry seems kind of pushed off to the side. They just appear into the scene, as if it were a passive background movement. 'Howdy folks! Just here to pick up our property. Hope you don't mind'. I would have had a couple of lines detailing the approaching sound of the robots and the characters wondering about what they were hearing. Now, Bunnie on the other hand really turned up the heat. Her cannon wasn't good enough for her and she decided to behead a couple of them with the sword (that Antoine just happens to carry around with him).

And wouldn't you know it, Security was slow to arrive. Were the castle guards trained aboard the USS Enterprise or something? (Star Trek joke; hope you got it!)

I think the whole Phi business as a whole needs to be reworked or something, because they really served no purpose besides adding another Sonic Battle reference. They show up and die--that's it. When I rewrite Chapter 13, I'll try to fix that, as well as consider your advice as well.

And yes, I get the Star Trek joke. :P


Chris000 wrote:Ch 14: Hmm... I always wondered what sort of small cataclysm occurred when Angel Island crashed into the sea. We saw in the Sonic Adventure games that the island makes a sizable wave that could be considered tsunami size. I shudder to think about people living in coastal regions, especially those in the Downundan/South Asian regions. Instead of 'bi-barreled', simply putting 'double-barreled' would have sounded a bit better. Nobody calls them bi-barreled shotguns, do they?

And another thing: Doc Fen MUST have these things timed in his office because he always manages to step through that ring right on time. Gotta love that man's punctuality!

I suppose it was the same cataclysm that occurred when the island crashed when the Master Emerald was shattered. And as for the bi-barreled thing...yeesh, I must have been in a hurry or something.

Chris000 wrote:Ch 15: I think that some of Knuckles' dialogue at the beginning sounded a little... weak for him actually. I think that he should have defended his position right off the bat and refused to help, even when threatened with torture, because a person like Knuckles wouldn't abandon his post even with some schmoozing. I see you throwing around some mythology terms like Argus, Charybdis, and Scylla, but given the other works of yours that I have read, that isn't turning out to be a very big surprise anymore. How much greek mythology is there on Mobius, I wonder...

Knuckles was pretty indecisive in Sonic Chronicles as to whether or not he'd help Ix the instant he learned the Nocturnus were echidnas. I was really trying to imitate that, but I do get what you're saying...not to mention that this is a different incarnation of Knuckles. I'll see about changing it a bit once I get to revising this particular chapter. Oh, and I didn't invent the Greek terms; again, those were straight from Sonic Chronicles.
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Postby The Shadow Emperor » Thu Jul 26, 2012 8:08 pm

So...the hiatus is over. Let the road to chapter 75 resume!!! :D

Chapter 73: Last Chance

Death Egg, outer corridors, evening

Mighty the Armadillo was finally on the threshold of rescuing his baby sister, who he had lost in his early childhood. And there was no way in heck he was about to let some ugly Eggman robot stand in his way. The huge, hulking Silver Sonic III slid down the hall, sped up by wheels and rocket launchers attached to the soles of its feet which caused sparks to fly every which way. Mighty bent his legs and assumed a defensive stance, protecting his friend Ray and the four echidnas from the oncoming robot, which swung a razor-sharp claw and attempted to slice Mighty in two. "Whoa," said Mighty, neatly dodging the attack by jumping sideways, "you sure are hostile, big guy. What'd I ever do to you?"

The robot didn't acknowledge his words, instead responding by curling into a spin-dash position and rolling at high speed, its massive spikes cleaving large gashes in the ceiling and floor as it rolled toward the unprepared Mighty, who was barely to leap aside as the rolling spike ball flew at him. "Move!" he cried as the robot approached his friends, and Ray and the echidnas dove to the side, narrowly avoiding a grim fate.

"That was too close," mumbled the Nocturnus Scout.

Silver Sonic's braking system was somewhat lacking, so it slid nearly fifteen extra feet when it uncurled, giving Mighty an open to run forward and deliver a blow to its chestplate, which had no effect aside from knocking it back a few feet. Silver Sonic retaliated with a swipe, whacking Mighty into his friends and barreling them over.

Orbot and Cubot watched the struggle from the side hallway, out of sight from Mighty and Ray. "Show them what for, Silver Sonic!" cheered Orbot ecstatically.

"'Ey, homie, don'cha think we oughta go let da boss know that some punks busted in? We don't wanna tick 'im off, y'know?" suggested Cubot to Orbot, who was intently watching as Silver Sonic performed another spin-dash only for Mighty to kick away it in midair, resulting in the robot's spikes becoming buried in the wall.

"Oh...great idea, pal!" said Orbot, slapping Cubot on the back good-naturedly while Silver Sonic struggled to free its spikes. Cubot stiffened and his eyes blinked, and he looked at Orbot excitedly.

"Thank you buddy!" said Cubot, but his voice had changed. "Hey! My voice! IT'S BACK! All right!" shouted Cubot with his old high-pitched voice, punching the air with excitement.

"Ah, there's the sweet sound my auditory processors know and love," said Orbot adoringly with his hands held together. "But I fear you just alerted the intruders to our presence...so perhaps we should make a break for it and go let the boss know?"

Mighty grabbed Ray's hand and pulled him to his feet as the disoriented Silver Sonic finally managed to dislodge its spikes from the wall, which caused the whole area of the hallway to collapse and bury it in rubble as it did so. "It sounds like there's some more 'bots up ahead!" yelled Mighty, running to the hallway occupied by Orbot and Cubot. "Follow me, everyone, and quickly, before Mr. Tall and Spiky over there recovers!"

Orbot and Cubot curled into ball and cube form, respectively, and rolled down the hallway, followed closely behind by Mighty, Ray and the four former hostages. "Faster, Cubot, faster!" said Orbot. "They're gaining, and we can't let them catch up to us!"

"I'm a cube! Do you know how hard it is to roll when you're one of those?" replied Cubot. The two rounded a corner, desperately trying to make it to Eggman before they were caught and attacked, as neither was built for combat.

Meanwhile, within the Death Egg's testing lab, Dr. Eggman boarded an Egg Mobile, flew into the air, and attached it to the cockpit it to his newest vehicle, the Hyper Egg Robo, while his gold-plated Phi robot flew up and did the same, sliding into its copilot socket. Snively, for his part, simply moved to the side in preparation for the upcoming test. "I'm extending the blast shield now, sir," said Snively as a thick metal shield rose from the ground. "But is this really necessary?"

"Don't be stupid, Snively! I have to test my latest machine," snapped Eggman, "otherwise how else will I know it's capable of defeating those pesky Freedom Fighters?" He activated the Hyper Egg Robo. The snakelike mech rose into the air, and a pair of large mechanical hands detached from the shoulders of the robot, floating freely. Eggman himself donned a pair of control gloves that allowed him to control the floating hands like an exoskeleton of sorts, while the on-board Phi robot handled the actual piloting. The doctor moved his hands sideways, and the hands did the same, responding elegantly and in sync. He then swung his fists sideways, and the corresponding floating hands did the same. "Very good, the systems are responding even better than I hoped!" said Eggman, cackling gleefully. "Now...let's see just how much damage this new Hyper Egg Robo is capable of."

Eggman drew back a fist and punched with all his might with both arms. The Robo's fists hands punched straight through the heavy blast shield, causing it to crumple like a piece of tinfoil. Snively covered his head as metal chunks from the shield rained down everywhere while the doctor's mad laughter reverberated throughout the room. "Muahaha! Excellent! This is absolutely perfect!" laughed Eggman, rejoicing in his success. "Snively, we're done lounging around here! Go to the control room and send the takeoff command. This day is about to get even better."

At that moment Orbot and Cubot rolled in, though Snively tripped over Cubot and banged his head against the wall, after which he slumped to the floor. "Sir! Sir! Intruders! Right behind us!" shouted Orbot, waving his hands around frantically.

"Hmm?" said Eggman, watching Mighty, Ray, and the four Nocturnus men sprint into the room. Mighty skidded to a stop when he saw the floating viper that was the Hyper Egg Robo floating above him, its hands clenched and ready for more punching. "Well, isn't this cute," muttered Eggman. "A pair of Sonic's pals and my former hostages, come to take me down, I presume."

"Your tyranny and oppression ends now, Doctor!" shouted Mighty, pointing a finger at Eggman. "If you don't surrender then I'll--"

"Ah-ah-ah, you insignificant little Mobian. I'm the one who makes the threats around here," said Eggman, and he threw a fist at Mighty. He avoided it by jumping backwards while the fist punched a large crater in the floor where he had been standing, only for the other hand to fly behind him and flick him off his feet unceremoniously.

Mighty hit the ground hard. "Oof!" he cried, and one of Eggman's fists grabbed him and tossed him into the air, where he impacted the ceiling and fell from several stories up back to the ground. However, Eggman punched him in midair and knocked him backwards, where he landed roughly, sliding nearly twenty feet along the ground before coming to a stop. "You...are...one tough puppy," grunted Mighty, rubbing his chest where he had been punched.

"I'm honestly surprised you're still conscious," said Eggman, "but I'd be happy to change that."

"Not gonna happen," replied Mighty, staggering to his feet. "I won't fail today! I am going to defeat you!"

"I'm afraid you have more pressing concerns right now, my friend," chortled Eggman. Mighty whirled around, seeing Silver Sonic standing over the unconscious forms of the Nocturnus hostages. The robot held a squealing Ray in his hand, its large metal claws tightening around his body.

"I'm afraid my robot here isn't very happy with you," said Eggman while Mighty's mouth dropped in horror, "and if you continue resisting then I'm afraid he might be compelled to squeeze the life out of your little friend. You seem to be in quite the predicament, eh?"

Orbot put his hands together gleefully. "Well, what's it going to be? Are you going to continue your fruitless effort to take down my boss and lose your buddy or will you surrender and stay alive? I know which one I'd choose."

Mighty looked at Ray's pleading eyes, then back at Eggman in his Hyper Egg Robo. His fists and jaw were clenched tightly, then he closed his eyes and feel to his knees and uttered the unthinkable words: "You win."

"A wise choice," said Eggman. "Orbot, Cubot, tie him up and sedate him--we don't want him causing any trouble. As for you, Silver Sonic III, you've performed splendidly! Take these two Freedom Fighters and place them in a Prison Egg. As for the echidnas, put them in the new Egg Grapes. They'll die slowly along with the rest of their pathetic clan. Oh, and Snively?"

His lackey groaned from the ground. "What?" he said, his voice muffled.

"I told you to go launch the Death Egg. Now go do it," said Eggman, landing the Hyper Egg Robo, detaching his Egg Mobile, and emerging from his seat. "The day of reckoning for my enemies is near. Now let's go get it over with."

"Woo-hoo! Let's go have some fun!" shouted Cubot.
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Postby Spectre the Hechidnat » Mon Sep 10, 2012 11:38 pm

I am definitely impressed. You brought together a ton of awesome elements without going overboard on it, and it all flowed great. I could totally see this as an actual comics story arc-Sonic Universe, or even the main series. Kudos to you, my friend; not bad for your first fic.
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Postby The Shadow Emperor » Tue Sep 11, 2012 10:05 pm

Spectre the Hechidnat wrote:I am definitely impressed. You brought together a ton of awesome elements without going overboard on it, and it all flowed great. I could totally see this as an actual comics story arc-Sonic Universe, or even the main series. Kudos to you, my friend; not bad for your first fic.

Many thanks for the compliments, Spectre. For those of you wondering what happened to Chapter 74, take heart--it is coming, just a little (okay, a lot) later than I planned. Between juggling three other fanfics intra and extraforum (four if you count the revised RotDB chapters), art requests, other online obligations, and schoolwork, I just haven't had the time to churn out chapters like I used to. Also, for reasons I won't go into now (cause doing so would spoil some stuff), Chapter 74 has been a rather tough one to plan, and even harder to actually write. I have written a fair amount of it, but as I started it I encountered another bout of writer's block that I still haven't overcome...until now. I think the encouragement I'm getting has been enough to put me back into the ol' writing mood, so I'll give Chapter 74 another tackle tomorrow. Wish me luck. :wink:

(Dear lord, I sure hope Chapter 75 will prove easier to write than this last one...if so, y'all can expect a pretty long wait...)
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Postby The Shadow Emperor » Sat Sep 15, 2012 8:54 pm

At long last, here's Chapter 74!

Chapter 74: The Survivors

Nocturne, lower levels, early evening

"Unbelievable," commented Shade, lowering her Nocturnus blaster. She looked down at her defeated enemy Thrash the Tasmanian Devil, who was sprawled out on his stomach on the floor, his eyes closed and had his tongue rolled out after taking a stun blast to the back. Nearby, the Brotherhood of Guardians members Sabre, Thunderhawk, and Sojourner were rousing themselves after winding up at the receiving end of one of Thrash's sonic roars.

A tall black shape popped into existence with a green flash next to Shade, causing her to jump a couple feet in the air and drop her weapon. "Eek!" she shrieked before recognizing the newcomer. "Oh...it's you. You almost gave me a heart attack!" she said, a hand on her chest as she inhaled heavily.

Spectre knelt down, grabbed Thrash's arms and legs, and hoisted his limp purple form on his shoulders. "My apologies for the unexpected appearance, Procurator," he told Shade respectfully. "Is it okay with you if I take this criminal to the designated interrogation room?"

"Um...okay. By the way, what happened to his dingo backup?" questioned Shade, picking her discarded blaster off the ground. Sabre and the others rose shakily to their feet, slightly disoriented.

"I've already taken the liberty of subduing them and placing them in cells, and given their history I sincerely doubt they'll be willing to cooperate with us," informed Spectre. He turned to the other Brotherhood members. "Sojourner, would you and the others be so kind as to help Shade and her people clean up this mess? I'll meet up with you in about five minutes and we'll plan our next move."

"Sure thing," said Sojourner before Spectre teleported away with Thrash. Shade and the Brotherhood ran over to the hallway, where Thrash's Nocturnus Clan victims were recovering from his brutal escape attempt. Shade knelt down by one of her men whose mask had been shattered and checked his pulse, shaking her head in utter disbelief.

Some time passed before Thrash the Tasmanian Devil would come to, and when he did he was very much alone in a dark room, seated at a table. He immediately lifted his head off the table, but his thoughts were still a bit fuzzy from the stun blast's side effects. Oh, please. How stupid are these echidnas? wondered Thrash, jumping out of his chair and locating the door quickly. No cell can hold someone as strong as me! he thought, flexing his arms and preparing to punch the door in with his massive strength.

"Hmph, I was wondering when you'd awaken," said a voice from the shadows. Thrash turned and the lights flickered on, revealing Spectre seated at the other end of the table.

Thrash did a comical double-take, nearly toppling over from surprise. "What the devil?!" he sputtered, stumbling backwards and tripping over a chair. "What are you? Why do you have keep getting in my way?!" he screamed as he got back up.

"I am a Guardian, Thrash. And I can also be your worst nightmare if you do not abandon your childish bid for revenge," said Spectre.

"Oh, yeah? And who are you to tell me what I can and can't do?" challenged Thrash, moving around the table and stopping so close to the helmeted echidna that their noses were practically touching.

"Back away from me," commanded Spectre so forcefully that anyone with an ounce of sense would've recoiled. Not Thrash, of course.

"I ain't going to be pushed around by some arrogant slimy echidnas anymore. My people nearly died because of yours, mate," continued Thrash, leaning in so close that the Guardian could smell his rank breath. "And I'm not going to stop until I have avenged the life of every Tasmanian devil who fell victim to your mystic voodoo. I am not going to stop until you are all on your knees, begging for the same mercy that you refused to show to my kind. Remember that."

Spectre looked up, a peculiar expression etched on his face. It wasn't anger, or sadness, or even hate...it was the face of a man deep in thought. Thrash, for his part, simply took a few steps back and continued staring at Spectre with unmistakable malice in his eyes. They stared at each other for a very long time.

Finally Spectre broke the silence. "All this time, and we haven't reaped the consequences of our actions," he mused, seemingly half to himself. "I have heard stories of gruesome Albion experiments that took place during the Forgotten Wars, but never did I imagine that there were survivors."

"Yeah, well you'd be surprised!"

"I am indeed. Now please have a seat and let's discuss this matter civilly," said Spectre calmly, pointing toward the chair at the opposite end of the table. Thrash stepped backward and looked befuddled, then rolled his eyes and sat down at the designated chair, resting on his elbows. "Thrash, I think an explanation is in order. But if you're willing to do it politely and without attacking us, then we can forgive today's little incident. Would you mind if I called in the rest of the Brotherhood so you could explain yourself to all of us instead of just me?"

"I don't care," muttered Thrash. "All I want is revenge, but I doubt you'll let me have it. So what the heck's the use? Go on ahead, it doesn't even matter to me anymore."

Spectre rose from his seat and exited the room. Thrash sighed and put his head in his hands, and his host returned a few minutes later along with the other three members of the Brotherhood, as well as Shade the Echidna. Sojourner and Thunderhawk took seats next to Spectre (who sat at the head of the table), while Sabre and Shade sat beside them. There was several moments of awkward silence.

"So, Thrash. What is it you wanted to tell us?" asked Sabre gently, knowing a harsh tone would only serve to worsen the already-sensitive matter.

"Why I hate you," said Thrash. "Why I hate echidnas, and why I tried to crush you all earlier today."

"Yes, please tell, because I for one am quite curious to hear your rationale for perpetrating an act of senseless violence against a people with which you have no personal gripe," said Shade sternly.

"No personal gripe, she says," said Thrash, before he burst out laughing. "Ha ha ha! That's a good one, woman! No personal gripe! C'mon, for crying out loud, are you people really that clueless? Really?!"

Everyone was dead silent and looked directly at Thrash. Thunderhawk shuffled his feet nervously as Thrash wiped a tear from his eye. "This is just too funny, mates. Your race mutates and butchers my people, and yet you guys are completely ignorant of it? HOW?!" bellowed Thrash, who was furious now. "It happened hundreds of years ago--the destruction of my race. There were a bunch of uptight echidnas who came to Downunda as a war went on, and they felt the need to capture and mutate my ancestors--FOR NO REASON AT ALL! Most of them were turned into monsters that couldn't think or feel! They were rabid beasts that attacked anything that moved, and those of us who survived the experiments barely scraped by! We spent generations trying to recover, but do we succeed? Heck no! I'm pretty much the last one here!"

Thrash was breathing hard now, his heart beating furiously and adrenaline coursing through his veins. "I hate echidnas. I hate your kind for what you did to us. We were a peaceful tribe who lived together before your idiot people come down to our home and turned us into monsters. I dunno how or why it happened, but I don't care! All I want now is revenge...AND I WILL HAVE IT!" Thrash roared and leaped onto the table, screaming in rage. The Brotherhood members immediately jumped from their seats and ran away as Thrash brought his fist down and punched a gaping hole into the middle of the conference table, breaking it in two. Hyperventilating, Thrash hollered in agony before he collapsed to his knees, shaking and pounding his fists against the wreckage of the table.

Shade stared at the pitiful sight, at the Mobian who had lost everything and had no one. "Thrash..." began Shade, "...I'm sorry."

"Look, I'll make this short and simple: there is no need to rush to violence, Thrash," said Sojourner, looking down at Thrash. "I cannot change what has already happened, but if you stand down then perhaps we can work something out."

"What did happen, for that matter?" asked Shade. "According to Thrash his people were mutated...what does that mean? What happened to them?"

"I know what happened," said Spectre, and Thrash looked up. "Hundreds of years ago, the ancient Albionites were engaged in a defensive war against the Order of Ixis, a magick-imbued wizarding cult. Albion dispatched an elite group of scientists to conduct experiments in Downunda to work miracles, but they went rogue and committed sins against nature. We never knew what exactly they did, but with Thrash's testimony I think the evidence is clear. They genetically mutated the Tasmanian devil population and turned them into savage Mobinis called devil dogs, which roam wild on this planet to this very day. And so now, having endured endless suffering, Thrash finally decided to avenge his people and try to return his species to prominence."

Thrash got up, huffing. "That's it! My people are almost extinct. There are only a few of us left, and I'd imagine in a generation or two we'll be long gone. So I decided that I wasn't going to let us simply die out, and I went to get the revenge we deserve."

"Thrash...getting revenge won't change what's already been done," said Shade. "If you stand down now, then I'll personally see to it that your people are taken care of. We will give them whatever it is they need to survive. Does that sound good?" The Tasmanian devil bent his head and closed his eyes, considering the unexpected offer.

Meanwhile, outside the city-fortress of Nocturne beneath an evening sky lit up by the moon, many echidnas worked to rebuild the once-great city of Echidnaopolis. Dark Legionnaires, Nocturnus, and former Echidnaopolians were all hard at work constructing more huts and buildings, and with roughly a hundred people working they were already making considerable progress; there were now several additional houses around the city square and many more cropping up around it. Their chief goal was to first create residential housing before they worked on other buildings such as stores, government buildings, Auroriums, schools, and other structures. Remington was quite satisfied with the progress, but more than anything he was pleased to see everyone, even Lien-Da and her Legion, working together to rebuild their city.

The Grandmaster, for her part, was standing in the city square overseeing the construction efforts. She ordered her Legionnaires to and fro, carrying boxes of building materials from within the depths of Nocturne as well as actual building itself. Every minute or so she checked her watch, wondering when Thrash would succeed in his mission. With every passing moment however, she became more and more apprehensive and impatient. Where is that stupid purple lug? she wondered finally, as the moon rose higher and higher into the heavens. He was supposed to have set the bombs in Nocturne and reported back to us half an hour ago! What in the world is keeping him?

"You seem tense," noted Kommissar Gae-Na, emerging from a recently-completed building. "What's wrong?"

"You know exactly what's wrong," spat Lien-Da, looking up at the towering black structure of Nocturne a quarter mile away. "My plan for revenge against the Nocturnus Clan was supposed to have worked by now! Why haven't the bombs been set off yet?"

"Well...perhaps they found out about it and stopped it before it began," said Gae-Na nervously. She remembered the conversation she had had with Shade a few hours earlier, in which she had secretly reported the upcoming bombing attempt to the Nocturnus Procurator in hopes of giving the Nocturnus time to mount a preemptive defense attempt, but to her great surprise Shade had already known.

"Yes, I know something bad is going to take place tonight," Shade had told Gae-Na, reassuring her. "Don't you worry, I'll take care of it."

Gae-Na looked at Lien-Da, whose chest was heaving as she angrily watched Nocturne not explode. "I want my revenge and I want it now," said Lien-Da through clenched teeth as she walked away. "And I will have it, Thrash and his incompetent idiots be darned." As she entered an empty building she activated her wrist communicator, sending a signal to the dingoes' leader. "General Helmut, this is Grandmaster Lien-Da," she said. "The plan has failed and your men failed to report back to me. Since we've been undoubtedly found out, there is only one recourse--to launch an all-out assault on the fortress and take out the Nocturnus ourselves. I will rally the Dark Legion; will you do the same with the Dingo Regime?"

"You bet your sorry dreadlocks I will," responded the voice of Helmet. "It's time to send these filthy echidnas packing."

Now, you're probably now wondering something along the lines of "what's next? What happens now? What's Chapter 75 going to be about?" Those are all excellent questions, and ones that will be answered before you know it. Stay tuned, for the best is yet to come. 8)
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